Saturday, April 5, 2014

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Who are you?
A perfect fit,
got me into
loving me.
Are you like
me or are you a
shadow, a hook
who got me into
being a child, or an
adult with an eye
for a future, or a
past like a fish
on dying hook
closing an
open
eye.


Note: I do not know if this poem is good enough to be published on the blog. I do not know if I have been able to convey what I wanted to, in the first place. My thought behind this poem is: It is a poem wherein a girl is asking a boy as to who he is, who has been a perfect fit in her life. He has taught her to love herself. Is he like her or is he her shadow or is he like a hook who has hooked her into being a child, and also an adult with her eyes set on her future, or, is he there to remind her of her past where she was like a fish stuck on a hook, dying and closing her open eye. The last words (in maroon) of each line make up the poem:


*As a part of NaPoWriMo. #5
*The prompt by NaPoWriMo today was to write a “golden shovel". This form was invented by Terrance Hayes in his poem, The Golden Shovel. The last word of each line of Hayes’ poem is a word from Gwendolyn Brooks’ poem We Real Cool. Brooks’ poem can be read by reading the last word of each line of Hayes’ poem.

*Also, do visit my friends who are participating in the challenge. You won't be disappointed.


20 comments:

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    1. Really? I am such a bad trying-to-be-a-poet. :(

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  2. This is pretty awesome Pooja. I am someone who has trouble strumming words together to make a cohesive poem. And I love the way the layout of the poem actually looks like a fish. Superbly done. Bravo

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    1. Well, when I started writing this poem, I had no intention to make it look like a fish. But, when I saw it, it was half a fish, so made it into a complete fish. Oh fish! I am confused now. :D Thanks Sid. :)

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  3. A lovely and cute poem which conveys the meaning clearly. Your interpretation of the poem was not required by me to understand.The picture of the fish and your wordings in the shape of a fish add beauty to the poem.
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  4. Beautiful, yes I could understand what you were trying to convey. Like you I also struggled with the form and am not sure what I came up with makes any sense. But we love challenges. Don't we girl??

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    1. Oh yes, loving NaPoWriMo challenges!

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  5. Its a really good one Pooja, I am amazed how such few words hold such deep meaning. Carry on!!

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